Reactions to PowerPoint Pitches II

3) The Source

• Overall first impression: The grammar is bad, there is too much unnecessary text and it is unclear what exactly the idea is until you get halfway through the slide.
• Ideas for improvement: Make sure spelling is correct. The first slide after the title slide is full of spelling errors. Most of the other slides have spelling mistakes as well. A lot of the news/social media sites are spelled wrong.
• There are also a lot of unnecessary punctuation marks throughout and capitalization is wrong at times. Make sure words that are supposed to be capitalized are and words that aren't supposed to be aren't. Also, sometimes in the titles of the slides all the words are capitalized and on others only the first word is. Be consistent. 
• There should be a name and contact information on the first slide and there isn't. The person viewing the slide should know who's company it is.
• As said in "The Art of Pitching," the slide background should be dark and the text should be light.
• There is way too much focus on other sites (good and bad) and not enough about why this company is good. Actually, there is barely any information about this company. I'm not sure why all of the information about history, hyperlinks, and other sites is included in this slide. It is irrelevant. 
• This pitch talks up other sites sometimes and I think that's a bad idea because it makes this company seem less necessary.
• There is no business model included in this pitch. There is also nothing about marketing/sales or the team that will run the company. Also, where is the company going from here?
• The sixth slide should be the second slide. There should be no question about what the company is and in this case, I was confused.
• What I liked about it: I like the overall idea for the company. I think a lot of people like the idea of having everything organized in one place.

4) Focused Fencing

• Overall first impression: It is very straightforward and informative. Also, the passion is very obvious.
• Ideas for improvement: As said in "The Art of Pitching," make the slide background dark and the text light. I do really like this theme though, especially the title slide with the little graphic.
• On the title slide make sure to include a name and contact information.
• I think there are too many pictures throughout and too much text. Less is better. Just keep it simple. Also, if this was actually being presented there wouldn't be a need for so much text because it could be explained orally.
• To go along with the opinion that there's too much text, it would be better to use bullet points instead of blocks of text.
• What I liked about it: It covered a lot of different aspects of the company. Each slide provided good information and added great value to the overall pitch.
• I like the slide about the sport itself. It showed why this company would be so important.
• I like that there was an offer. It made it seem more real.
• I really liked the passion behind this. It is obvious that this company actually cares about what it is doing.